The piece I would like to revise is a 12 sentence story/stort story. It is about the time I got sliced open by a badger. I remember the pain and blood from my incident so I wrote about it. I would like tell the story in more detail than what I did in 12 sentences.
1) One day my buddy and I had our baseball bats and were out hunting grouse.2) He had an aluminum baseball bat and I had a wooden one.3) We were by the ponds in the woods.4) While we were walking in the woods, we found a badger.5) I thought it was dead, so I heaved a stick at it.
6) Can you guess what happened next? 7)You guessed it right.8) As it chased me, I started to run, and it kept chasing me, so I started hitting it with my bat.9) I eventually won the fight against lean-mean-fighting-machine badger since I only walked away with one deep gash on my heavily bleeding left knee.
10) As I stared in fear at the dead badger I had just realized that I had just killed a mother badger that was just trying to protect its babies.11) It must have been as protective as a wild mother bear protecting her cub. 12) When we got back home, my mom took me and my bloody pants to the Emergency Room.
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